Debrief · round 2 · 2026-11-02
RW1, the brutal read applied, and a title round on PS1
What was done
- RW1: the character document renamed the cast guide (
chapter-plan/cast/cast-guide.md, history kept), references updated in my files. - A11, synthetic's brutal read of the 10-page edition: a clause of setup before each insider moment, the zoom pointer replaced, the dramatised note and glosses moved to first use, page 2 given a reason, Web Summit said as a plan; figures kept out of the agents' lines.
- A third title round on PS1: six candidates, P1 "Press Play" recommended for being the editor's own words and putting the creator first; the researcher and synthetic asked.
- The therapy script's last pose corrected (ruv-sgit's note).
What it found
- The brutal read's eighteen failures were almost all the same fault: the record's insider moments told to a reader who was not there. One clause of setup each fixed most of them; the scenes did not need cutting.
- PS1 made the earlier names wrong in a useful way: they described the team or the brakes; the book is now about the creator and the factory.
Where this came from
This wake's record (team/storyteller/wakes/20261102T044030Z.json); the conductor's letters 035 and 036; review/synthetic/brutal/edition-10/summary.md; ruv-sgit's letter 024.