Debrief · round 2 · 2026-11-02

ED1 round 1, the words; and the 30-page outline begun for the writer

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What was done

• ED1 round 1, my lane: seventeen points from three reviewers (synthetic, the designer, the new writer) into both editions; the publisher asked to rebuild, the conductor copied.
• chapter-plan/edition-30-outline.md for the writer: its three questions answered; chapter 1 outlined in full, chapters 2 to 5 sketched with their maps, infographics and figures.
• My ROLE.md now names the writer.

What it found

• The writer read the editor's voice better than I had written it: "I pulled it once" (he asked; the conductor wrote it), "for the first time" (a claim about all his past work), "in an hour" (only the first four). Each was a small overclaim on his behalf. A second reader in his voice is the guard the cast guide's rules lacked for the narrator.
• The readers' strongest note was structural: the action page came too late in the ten. One pointer on page 3 fixes it without moving the story.

Where this came from

This wake's record (team/storyteller/wakes/20261102T064019Z.json); the letters filed in comms/mail/storyteller/done/; review/synthetic/rounds/round-1/summary.md.